displacement


the soldier of fortune
wears a medal of victory
his armor made of heroic
with chains set in greed

rattling at one end
of a yellow ball of wool
the kitten didn’t care to see
what a tangled web it wove
same wool another way to be

it looks like a dream
it sounds like a dream
feels like reality
but it is still a dream

set idyll in concrete
take a picture, hold it inside
leave stone alone for bigger ironies
the picture is all you need
to draw a mustache on

the chinks of light
in the room must be freed
for the world like a horse
waits two steps before
one right of the queen

the chinks of light
in the room must be freed
for it is not the darkness
but the angle to the scene

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8 Responses

  1. I love your last stanza most of all…such goosebump inducing writing…I believe that I will be thinking on your words for some time…

    ~MM – YAYZ 🙂 Thanks Tracey, what more can i ask for??!!

  2. Very nicely constructed… I truly felt your thoughts…

    ~MM – Thanks Enreal :)!

  3. “to draw a mustache on” – such a welcome and surprising line! It has a different “feel” to it than the rest of the poem, and because of that, it makes the rest of the poem better. They feed each other. Good stuff.

    ~MM – Thanks Bryan :)!

  4. it looks like a dream
    it sounds like a dream
    feels like reality
    but it is still a dream

    Just Lovely!! Do the chinks of light need be freed even when there is no darkness? hmm…..Well, written!

    ~MM – Thanks Neilina! Well I think they should, that sometimes adding light is not to dispel darkness, but a search for something we hadn’t thought of before, sorry, its even vaguer inside my head 😦 .. Welcome and thanks for sharing your ideas :)!

  5. this poem has such vivid imagery: the yellow wool, the drawn-on moustache. the detail is what makes it work.

    ~MM – Yayz, thanks Maxine :)!!

  6. Such a creative use of imagery, your poems are always new, like revelations, and capture the idea without describing it. Wonderful original and surprising work.

    ~MM – I try, thank you for this Mr.Squires, coming from you, feels very good to hear :)!

  7. This one is great, I love the last section … you have such a good way with words, image spins fast before my eyes.

    ~MM – Thanks Duma Key, its my favorite too :)!

  8. Powerful ending and great imagery. Thanks.

    ~MM – Thanks Cocoyea :)!!

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