the soldier of fortune
wears a medal of victory
his armor made of heroic
with chains set in greed
rattling at one end
of a yellow ball of wool
the kitten didn’t care to see
what a tangled web it wove
same wool another way to be
it looks like a dream
it sounds like a dream
feels like reality
but it is still a dream
set idyll in concrete
take a picture, hold it inside
leave stone alone for bigger ironies
the picture is all you need
to draw a mustache on
the chinks of light
in the room must be freed
for the world like a horse
waits two steps before
one right of the queen
the chinks of light
in the room must be freed
for it is not the darkness
but the angle to the scene
June 12, 2009 at 11:59 am
I love your last stanza most of all…such goosebump inducing writing…I believe that I will be thinking on your words for some time…
~MM – YAYZ
Thanks Tracey, what more can i ask for??!!
June 12, 2009 at 6:18 pm
Very nicely constructed… I truly felt your thoughts…
~MM – Thanks Enreal
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June 12, 2009 at 8:51 pm
“to draw a mustache on” – such a welcome and surprising line! It has a different “feel” to it than the rest of the poem, and because of that, it makes the rest of the poem better. They feed each other. Good stuff.
~MM – Thanks Bryan
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June 13, 2009 at 12:31 pm
it looks like a dream
it sounds like a dream
feels like reality
but it is still a dream
Just Lovely!! Do the chinks of light need be freed even when there is no darkness? hmm…..Well, written!
~MM – Thanks Neilina! Well I think they should, that sometimes adding light is not to dispel darkness, but a search for something we hadn’t thought of before, sorry, its even vaguer inside my head
.. Welcome and thanks for sharing your ideas 
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June 15, 2009 at 11:51 am
this poem has such vivid imagery: the yellow wool, the drawn-on moustache. the detail is what makes it work.
~MM – Yayz, thanks Maxine
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June 16, 2009 at 12:34 am
Such a creative use of imagery, your poems are always new, like revelations, and capture the idea without describing it. Wonderful original and surprising work.
~MM – I try, thank you for this Mr.Squires, coming from you, feels very good to hear
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June 16, 2009 at 2:29 pm
This one is great, I love the last section … you have such a good way with words, image spins fast before my eyes.
~MM – Thanks Duma Key, its my favorite too
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June 20, 2009 at 10:22 pm
Powerful ending and great imagery. Thanks.
~MM – Thanks Cocoyea
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